Cephues|| Tom, Loner [02/03/2013]

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Name: Cephues 

Gender: Tom

 Age: 34 moons

Clan: Loner

Position: n/a

Quick Description: A midnight black cat with bright blue eyes

 Description: Cephues is a very dark black tom with lighter legs and tail. On his front right paw, it looks like there is a faint stripped pattern, only a shade lighter than the rest of his pelt. This marking is very small and Cephues likes to stare at it in awkward situations.On his back left leg a small oddly shaped pattern lies there, that is similar to the one on his paw. He has bright blue eyes that look brighter than they really are due to the darkness of his pelt.Although he has such a simple appearance, it’s a stunning one.

Cephues has a strong and muscular build, the result of many moons of walking in land where he is not wanted. His shoulders are broad and very strong, they are his best asset, using the strength to push enemies off him. Unlike most loners, he is well fed as his father was a gifted hunter and taught Cephues how to hunt and fight off attackers. As well as his good build, he has very sharp claws giving his prey a quick and easy death.  Due to his heavy build, Cephues is a very slow cat, and not very quiet. His heavy paws thud against the earth, shaking the ground beneath him.

Personality: Cephues is very quiet. He does not see the need to talk, even around other cats he rarely speaks, this is due to the fact he has been alone for so long. This can be quite annoying for some cats, desperately trying to get him to talk. Although Cephues is very quiet, he is not shy. He enjoys being around other cats even if he doesn't get to very regularly. He enjoys the warmth of other bodies around him, and the feeling of being with another cat fills him up, making him all warm and bubbly inside. Cephues often hangs around Twoleg place, as he finds the kittypets very interesting, and fun to be around. His Kittypet friends had offered him to live with them more than once, but he is well suited to loner life, and enjoys the freedom of it. When Cephues sees blood of a cat he automatically feels protective over this cat, he doesn't like the sight of another cat being injured, and doesn't get why cats have to fight. In Cephues eyes, differences should be sorted with words. However, if the cat doesn't get it, Cephues will fight if he has to
Skills: Cepheus has a very strong and muscular build, giving him a very good advantage in hunting, he is always well fed due to this helpful skill.

Likes: The company of other cats

Mice

Swimming

Dislikes: Crowfood

Fighting

History:  Cephues has always been a loner, and he had a fairly average kit hood, the only real thing that happened was when he decided to leave his mother and father's care. witch was simple enough, one day he came back to their den and said ' I want to explore the world, maybe one day I will come back'. And with that he left, and has never turned around.

However, at the young, but fierce age of 15 moons he heard of the bloodthirsty Axe, he was a mad cat who wanted some sort of ‘revenge’ on this small little kittypet who had just kitted a litter of 4 adorable kits. When Cephues went to the Twoleg place that morning, to see his friends, the queen came running out of her nest, screaming for help. Cephues got her to calm down, and eventually she explained that he had taken one of her kits.  Cephues could almost smell the blood. He knew the kit was gone, there was nothing he could do to help the kit. When he looked at the distressed queen, it fell on her.Without communicating, they both knew it was too late. Cephues knew that Axe was not done, that he would come back for all of them. So Cephues insisted that he stayed with the queen till he knew she and her kits were safe. Cephues stayed with the queen for several moons, while her kits grew up, always wanting to go outside and play. Cephues and the queen- Katia, would constantly try to contain them, always telling them it was too cold or raining. Although they were not his, Cephues raised the kits as if they were his own. After a while Katia grew less stressed, thinking he was dead, or had given up. Cephues knew though. He knew he was waiting for the kits to be bigger, but still weak. 

And then it happened. Cephues had been out hunting, the kittypet sludge didn't agree with him, he had only been out for a total of 8 minutes, catching the one skinny vole. But, that was all the time Axe needed. Cephues walked into the nest, and froze. Blood was everywhere; Cephues scanned everywhere, searching for anyone of the kits, or Katia. He ran around frantically lifting everything, moving curtains, rugs. Out of the corner of his eye, Cephues saw a small matted pile of tabby fur. Cephues ran over and lifted the kit up, and onto the plush bed. The kit looked at him and said “ He took mummy, Kaline and Peeta. I tried to stop him, and get Peeta back,but Peeta was asleep.” Tears filled the poor kits eyes, and Cephues stayed with the kit, helping him heal. But one day, Cephues woke up, and the kit was stiff and cold. He had gone to sleep, and would never wake up again.

Cephues buried the kit-who he named Fortita, a name that was brave, and clear in Cephues eyes. Cephues visits the kit everyday; and believes that to him, death will be a blessing. When death takes Cephues, Cephues will finally be re-united with the ones he loved.

Relationships: 

Mother: Petal, alive, nowhere to be found

Father: Rock, alive,nowhere to be found

Siblings: n/a

Love:  Katia, deceased

Stepkit:Kaline, deceased

Stepkit:Peeta, deceased

Stepkit: Fortita,deceased 

[⋆ Phia ⋆]

⋆Not yet accepted!

Yayy, more loners! You can never have enough of those sexy beasts omg. Alright, let's see what this lad could use in his application.

First of all, unfortunately we don't exactly encourage these kinds of markings. We're lenient on fur patterns and colours, but that's about as far as you guys can get. Unrealistic markings won't really go far. Unless you can explain his markings in a more realistic way (cats don't know what constellations are) you might need to give him "simpler" markings, should I put it that way. As for his personality, it flows on really well- until the blood part. That could be accepted but you'd still have to explain it further. You go on about his protectiveness and fierce loyalty to the injured, then claim he's vulnerable. Why? I'm gonna need more developing there. ^-^

Now I'm a little uneasy about his history- while your ideas are fairly nice, it seems you rushed a little in presenting them. You start off quite abruptly there- before you know it Cephues is 15 moons already. What happened before that?

Other than that, I'll just say that the history part might need a hard, good proof-reading before it's good to go. The wording is a little confusing and needs fixing here and there. One or two unrealistic remarks will need to be looked at as well ("-who he named Fortita which means brave in Latin." I don't think cats know latin either o3o). He'll be good to go after these changes! ^-^

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⋆Accepted!

Brilliant changes! Cephues looks good to go now. Feel free to start roleplaying your stunning lad!