Fallingink [she-cat]

[Adeline]

Name: Fallingink
Gender: She-cat
Age: 20 moons
Clan: SilentClan
Position: Warrior
Quick Description: skinny white and grey she-cat with blue eyes.

Description: Fallingink's base colour is white, with grey-silver streaks going down. They fade back into white as they get closer to her back/shoulders. She has the same markings on her face, and down her legs. She has black boots on her legs, and her tail is striped black. Her ears are a dark grey. Fallingink's build is a small slender body, which gives her more agility and swiftness. Her build also does not play in her favor when she is pinned, it would take a lot of her strength to fight back. Her eyes are a deep turquoise blue, that are innocent and wide. Her scent is the scent of a storm in early spring, bringing in the bittersweet smell of a storm and mud.

Personality: Fallingink is a soft hearted, sensitive, and curious she-cat. She loves kits, but is afraid she will never have her own. The she-cat can be sensitive at times, at certain things. She hates being teased especially, as she is a lot of the time. When she is teased, she would usually not try and fight back. At the first chance she would have, she would escape from the cats. Fallingink then would stay out of camp for a few hours, cooling off. When she returns to camp, she tries go avoid the glance of the teasing cats. Fallingink is curious, which hers her into trouble. some times.

Skills:
• Running/being fast
• Swift and light-footed
• Agile

Faults:
• not very strong
• can be pinned easily
• it is hard for her to fight back
• sensitivity

Likes/Dislikes:
Dislikes:
• Loud noises
• Mean cats
• Snotty cats
• Two legs
• Monsters
• Being teased
• Heights

Likes:
• Running
• Sitting at night and watching SilverPelt
• Blue
• Storms
• The scent of storms

History:

[Kit:] Fallingkit was born in late spring, during a rain storm. A few  splatters of rain fell on her white pelt, almost as if making her markings. She was abandoned at birth, her mother dying from loss of blood. Her father didn't want anything to do with her, leaving at once. The small kit was found by patrols, and raised. She never made any friends, and she was fine with that for the time being. Though, she got teased for many different things. She tried to not play fight, she disliked it very much. Falling kit would try and defend other kiits, but would end up as the target when mean kits would be teasing. The young kit was stronger than she is as a warrior, she would stand up and use witty remarks to defend herself.
[Apprentice:] Fallingpaw was proud of her name, but not too proud. She looked up to the other warriors and older apprentices, but tried to stay out of their way. During her apprenticeship, she hadnt seen her mother at all in StarClan, and nightmares haunted her. Throughout all the bad stuff, she trained hard and long, and finally passed her assesment!
[Warrior:] As Fallingink, she became a warrior! She was proud of herself, doing it for her mother too. She is sometimes teased of how sensitive and soft she is, how little prey she brings in. Falling ink wakes up every morning, saying: "maybe this will be the day ill find a friend".

Relationships:
Best friend: n/a
Friend/s: n/a
Crush: n/a
Mate: n/a
Kits: n/a

Other: Have any advice? Contact me! Also, edited :3

[⋆ Phia ⋆]

Not yet accepted!

You have an overall very pretty and intriguing character there! And it's very nice to see some new Warriors outside HiddenClan! ^-^ However, there are two or three points I'd like you to work on before I can accept her.

The part of your appearance regarding your character's fur colour and markings is very satisfying- but what about her build? You say in her quick description that she's a skinny cat; can you explain that a little more in the appearance field, as well as her build in general? You say she's generally skilled in the agility and swiftness field more, so I'd like to read a bit about what kind of special characteristics her body has that help her to accomplish those.

The second point is her personality; I'd actually like to see a lot more development in there. You say she can be sensitive; in which situations does that occur? How does she deal with it? What kind of reactions does she get because of it? You also mention that she hates being teased which could imply that she gets teased frequently, so I'm going to assume she has a noticeable flaw or two hidden somewhere in there. I'd love to see them revealed!

(As a final tiny note, I'd also like an explanation regarding her crush. She has never met Foxfur, so I'm not entirely sure how she can be crushing on him already.)

[Adeline]

It's editing all weirdly rat -sobs- I edited it but now it's not showing pictures or anything Dx

[⋆ Phia ⋆]

Accepted!

I fixed it for you- there were plenty of random codes scattered in there. o3o I like your changes, neat job! Feel free to start roleplaying! (cough the irony, Silent/Echo/WhisperClan cats will have to wait a little bit until the high positions are chosen. xD)