Erminekit || Kit of WhisperClan

[Ermielicious]

                                                                                                                            Erminekit

 

{Name} Erminekit|Erminepaw|Ermine(pending...)
{Gender} Tom
{Age} 4 Moons
{Clan} WhisperClan
{Position} Kit
{Quick Description} A white bespeckled tom with a russet cape and a warm amber gaze. 

                                                                                                          

{Description} Erminekit is a milky white colored tom. He has buttery amber eyes with streaks of yellow gold. His eyes are ringed with a dark scarlet. The scarlet turns into a mottled ginger that is flecked with white. The ginger leads along his vertebrate, widens across his shoulders, before it comes to a stop on his slender flanks. Cream patches splatter across his sides. White speckles flicker across his cape and his face, while along the white patches, russet streaks dot his short fur.  He has a long, spindly tail that is pure white capped with a rich black. His paws are dipped in liquid iron rust that cuts off at the joint.  His knees and hocks are also capped in the ginger that splatters his paws. Erminekit is a stocky and muscular tom with short legs but powerful muscles hinged underneath. 

                                                                                                        

{Personality}
     ~ "Just look on the bright side!"
Erminekit seems to see the bright side in every situation, whether a battle is about to rage or he has just lost prey that he was stalking since sunhigh. He is rarely seen with dull eyes and can always manage out praise. If he doesn't have anything nice to say, he just smiles and keeps quiet. You'll rarely ever see Erminekit in a foul mood... and while his optimism can get in his way--he may lose motivation after he fails and consoles himself for another time--he is a positive spirit to be around and can be quite playful and exciting.
    
      

~ "Liar, liar! Fur on fire!"
Erminekit is a natural liar--the words slip off his tounge like honey. When in doubt or ashamed of what he has done, he simply lies and everything seems to get better. If he doesn't agree with something, he lies and says hat he does approve. Unless he can gain something out of the truth, he tells little white lies; if he was out playing in the camp at night, he may lie for no reason and say he was cramping and was in the dirtplace. One day, charming Erminekit's lies are going to come smashing down like misplaced bricks on his petite litte head. 

 

       ~ "

     

                                                                                               

{Skills}
Erminekit is a feirce warrior; he will fight to the death to protect his clan and loved ones. He is an outstanding hunter of birds due to his powerful hindlegs and he can paw them out of the air due to small blue webs nearly transparent between his claws (was not is shop so... why not?). He has powerful jaws and is a strong swimmer due to the wiry muscles that lace underneath his short closly-haired fur and the thin webbing of skin that catches the water. He is a nimble runner on the open moor and is very flexible. The ability to squeeze through brambles and under close places is quite naturral for this fellow.

{Faults}
However, Erminekit's claws are stubbly; while they are still present, they grow slowly and are pliable and spongy. He has little to no traction on the forest floor, since his paw paws are also pumiced smooth.  His stubby legs allow him to run quickly, but the exertion of this also tires him out. His lungs are slightly weak; long term running causes him a slight wheeze. He is more suited for a short gallop than  a long canter.

 

{Likes/Dislikes}
Likes:
    Hunting
    Swimming
    Fighting
    Hanging out with friends and family
   Playing with his prey
    Fish
Dislikes:
    Know-it-alls
    Braggers
    Being honest
    Squirrels and mice
    Running for long distances
    Showing his paws
    
{History} {None due to no knowledge of life}

{Relationships}
Mother| Peatwhisker
Father| Greeneyes
Siblings| Applepaw, Mistpaw
Grandfather| Thornclaw
Grandfather| Blazeecho
Grandmother| Scornedleaf
Grandmother| Unknown
Aunt(s)| Dashingbreeze
Aunt(s)| Maplewhisker
Uncle(s)| Riverpaw
Uncle(s)| Fleetfoot


{Other}
 Nicknames include: Ermie, Ermster, Bert and Ermie, Erms, etc.

[Seren♫]

Approved!
Much better! It's much clearer where his markings are now and I love the way you made it flow from one to the next in a clear, logical order.
Pending Approval!

Overall nice bio, Ermielicious! I think the only thing that needs a teeny bit of editing is the Description. His appearance to me is not clear... idk. It doesn't read very well to me and it causes confusion. Have another go at it perhaps? Keep it simple, if he is a tom with splotchy russet and cream markings like I think he is, then say so. Also keep the shapes realistic, we don't allow star, nor cloud shaped markings. Other than that I think Erminekit has a fairly nice bio. Nicely done.

One last thought I had just now, His Liar characteristic doesn't really match his other personality attributes. Might want to re-think that. Just a thought.